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Post by .:Maplestar:. on Nov 29, 2008 11:40:48 GMT -5
This is a picture of me:i130.photobucket.com/albums/p273/On_Vacation/Moonclaw2.jpgI was born with the name:Ghostwhisper Starclan have granted me a:She-cat I have walked this territory for:22 moons I am a:Warrior of Phantomclan I appear as: Ghostwhisper's figure is slender and delicate. She is a silver-gray tabby with bright green eyes. Her nose is a redish color. She has a notch out of her left ear. My attitude is:She is sweet and quiet. She tends to be shy around cats who aren't her clan. She loves kits and wishes to have some someday. She is an excellent hunter. My past:Ghostwhisper is pure Phantomclan. Her parents and littermates died in the battle the her clan and Mountainclan led. Her mother was Spiritstep, her father was Soulfire. Her littermates were her best friends. She always regretted letting them go into battle that day. Her mentor, Pouncetail, taught her well and he died in the battle as well.
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Post by Waterspray on Nov 29, 2008 11:56:21 GMT -5
Once again, just giving you a few pointers in lieu of Ren's being here 1. Past is really short again. Who was her mentor? Was one of her littermates her best friend? Etc. etc. etc. 2. Spelling errors up the wazoo. Additude, Ghostwhisper's is, etc.
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Post by ♫.Wandersoul;; on Nov 29, 2008 12:23:10 GMT -5
Hrm...I don't usually make a big deal of pointing out errors in normal warrior profiles, but since Waterspray did make some suggestions, I'll ask that you at least check the spelling/grammar real quick before I move this. =)
Still, accepted as soon as that's done =p
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Post by .:Maplestar:. on Nov 29, 2008 13:49:23 GMT -5
thanks!
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