Icefur||Swiftclan

[icestar]

Picture:
Name:Icefur
Gender:She cat
Age (as of entering rp): 60 moons
Rank and Clan:deputy
Physical Description: She is a fluffy white she cat with bue eyes.Her eyes used to be as bright as ice but due to her ageing,they are duling out aand so is her snowy fur.
Personality:Very loyal and lovest serve her clan and keep them healthy.
History:When she as a kit she loved her life and helped her kin.When she became an apprentice,Sh served her clan 24 7! When she became a warior,She was more thatn happy to take a dozen apprentices.Her mate,Goldenface was a little different that that....Bu when she bacame a deputy,She tok her responsibility seriously and supported her leader,Spottedstar.She has greived over her for while and but has fallen back down to deputy.


Rp example:Icestar walked back into camp from long journey to get noine lives.Goldenfac ran up to her and started to lick her furiously.you took so long! he yowled.Goldenface.......it say in the warrior code......i cant.....have a mate.Her voice cracked as he said it.She saw Goldenface back away slowly. You swore to Sarclan you would be there for me and with me all the time.said shakily.Icestar stared sadly at him.I need to beHer voce cracked again, on my own. Then Golden face padded to the warriors den in the dark night sky.

[♫.Wandersoul;;]

You're missing the second half of the leader application. =)

[icestar]

holy crap!ok then ill get it.

[♫.Wandersoul;;]

Thanks =) Hmm...okay, now that that's up I can make a decision. =P

I'm sorry, Icestar, but I don't think I can accept this. ^^' I'm hoping for a really diverse group of roleplayers on this site, and considering that, I think I really need the best of the best for our leaders. There's a LOT of responsibility involved with the title of "leader" on this site, more than just roleplaying a cat -- a lot of managing, and some dealing with people too.

If you're really set on being a leader at some point, I'd recommend you wait until a few more leader positions are filled and apply to be one of their deputies. That way you'll get the position eventually, and meanwhile you'll get an idea of what I'm looking for in a leader. =)



Some suggestions I'd make for a future high-rank profile;

1) Spellcheck spellcheck spellcheck! There's quite a few typos in your profile. If you have a lot of typos, it's the first thing the person reading your profile will notice, and it doesn't look good.

2) Detail is important. =) I'm not saying describe every little thing that has ever had to do with your character -- that just comes across is wordy and annoying. I'm saying, add something to make your character UNIQUE. I saw one good example of this in your profile, when you mentioned how Icestar's eyes were dull -- but add more! Dull eyes can't be the only distinguishing trait of a cat, otherwise it's boring. =P Plenty of cats are loyal and love to serve their Clan -- what makes them DIFFERENT? You see what I mean?

3) This isn't really something to fix, but I wanted to mention it. In the first "leadership" question, I was asking about YOU, as a forum member, roleplayer and person, as well as your character. Did you miss that or is it a confusing question? I don't want more people to make that mistake. =P




And finally (WHEE Ren loves to ramble xD), please don't be offended or discouraged that I turned you down. I'm being picky, and obviously you've got some talent if you're a leader on another site, right? =P

[icestar]

can i hold her here until i can make her a deputy?and i have typos cuz my brother pretty much kills the keyboard,

[♫.Wandersoul;;]

In that case, I pity your keyboard xD

Sure, you can leave the profile here if you want. Feel free to roleplay her as a warrior in the meantime if you like -- just remember to let the SwiftClan leader know that you're trying out for deputy when we have one (if you're sticking to SwiftClan, that is). ^^

[icestar]

yep!I am!

[--Ghosty]

Accepted!
Just promise me that you will edit the typos later alright? That doesn't mean to wait a whole month to change them. ^.-